April 27, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday


           Welcome to Weekend WritingWarriors and Snippet Sunday where writers come together to share snippets (8  sentences) of their current projects.
           This excerpt is from Forty Years in a Day. The scene takes place in Italy, 1906. Angela must tell her husband, Alfredo, that their daughter has left for America.

 

        She held on to the back of a chair for support and looked down at the table to avert his gaze. Her heart was pounding hard inside her chest, and she took a few deep breaths, trying to calm down. “There’s no easy way to tell you this,” she finally said.

       “What is it, Angelina?” he said, heaving a sigh of slight impatience.

       “I gave Victoria our savings so she could go to America and be with Dominick. She’ll be safe with her brother. He’ll take care of them.” As she spoke she saw her husband’s face twist into a knot of disbelief and rage, and panic descended upon her like darkness on a moonless night. “She was miserable. She was so unhappy…and the children. Believe me, Alfredo, it’s the only way they could get away from him.”

       Slamming his hand to his chest, he demanded, “Where are they?”
 
 
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Mona




15 comments:

  1. Wow! This has incredible emotion it. I need to know more! :-) Good #8sunday post :-)

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  2. Oh, dear. That woman has brass you know whats. Standing up to her husband in that era. God only knows what his reaction will be! My heart was racing with hers.

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  3. What bravery! I hope he doesn't go too far in his anger!

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  4. Great, great post. I flinched when he slammed his hand to his chest. Not good! LOL

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  5. The concept of "tension" in writing personified here.
    Kudos!

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  6. Terrific tension and emotion here. Great job showing what's at stake for her.

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  7. Wow, a high stakes situation, SO much emotion. Excellent excerpt!

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  8. Oh man, she's in trouble! Emotion-packed snippet. Nice!

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  9. The emotions on both sides are so incredibly sharp. Great job!

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  10. I like how you paint the picture is such quick strokes.

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  11. Oh, wow. Good for her! She's doing what's best for her daughter. There are consequences, I know, I read about the book. Sounds fascinating. Thanks for sharing this snippet.

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  12. I can only imagine the horrors her daughter and grandchildren must have been so desperate to escape that even her own father couldn't be told until after the fact.

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  13. What an intriguing excerpt. I'm eager to learn more.

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  14. I'm new to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, and I'm very grateful for all your lovely comments!

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  15. Welcome to Snippet Sunday! I'm happy you're here. :-)

    Wow. I can't even imagine leaving home and family in the days when that usually meant never seeing them again. This is one of my favorite times in history and I look forward to reading more!

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